This new form may be useful or aesthetically valid; as with the Beam form, I can't say; but it is new. The poem works like this: two stanzas of ten lines each; moving from the middle lines (final line of stanza one, first line of stanza two) & moving up for stanza one, down for stanza two, the poem is a kind of mirror- the lines "answer each other", with slight variations & refinements. Here's the poem in question, "hair":
"we" were in english class, next to being next to
a matter of adding a porch or rolling in mud.
she said to me: "you're caring"
sounded to me like: "you're a fairy"
the hair became a kind of relic, the way
a once-used metaphor might (in its' "it")
leaving high school was a "volta" i'm still
combing out with meredith's mud-brown hair.
combing out with meredith's mud-blown hair.
leaving "leaving high school", another "volta"
now, becoming a once-used metaphor (out & "out")
that way is a hair-relic, "me" a heretic; her tic
sounds to me like: "you're a weirdo"
she said to me: "you're a weirdo"
a matter of adding peach or rolling in hay
with each other.
"we're" in a separate class, "late for the next one".
What could we call this? I'm at a loss. Should I start a series of these?